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   제 목   my experience in philippines!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!    상 태  
   작성자   dongeen    등록일   2011-08-22
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I went to Manila philippines during last winter vacation. And I studied English very hard.Every weekdays, I studied English.But every weekends I went to philippines' beautiful spots.So I have a lot of good experience.Among many experience, I can remember Hundred Island a lot.I visit here 2days 1night with my friend's family.First I unpack in boarding house.(It similar with hotel.It has big swimming pool.)I visit only 3 island. I can't remember each island name, but I can remember each island's feature.First island was similar with beach It was so clean. And second island was cave.It has many strata.I took my picture a lot. Last island was real beach.And also had a lot of people.but It was little bit dirty.But I played realy funny. I can't forget it forever.

 My Experience in Philipines

I went to Manila philippines during last winter vacation. And I studied English very hard.

-> I went to Manila, Philippines last winter vacation and studied English very hard.

Every weekdays, I studied English.But every weekends I went to philippines' beautiful spots.

-> On weekdays, I studied English but on weekends, I went to Philippines' beautiful spots.

So I have a lot of good experience.Among many experience, I can remember Hundred Island a lot.I visit here 2days 1night with my friend's family.

-> So I had a lot of good experience and among those many experiences, I can remember Hundred Island a lot. I  visited there two days and one night with my friend's family.

First I unpack in boarding house.(It similar with hotel.It has big swimming pool.)I visit only 3 island.

 -> First, I unpacked in the boarding house. (It is similar with hotel which has big swimming pool). I visited only three islands.

I can't remember each island name, but I can remember each island's feature.First island was similar with beach It was so clean. And second island was cave.It has many strata.I took my picture a lot.

-> I can't remember each island's name, but I can remember each island's feature. First island was similar with beach and it was so clean. Second island was cave. It has many strata. I took a lot of pictures there.

Last island was real beach.And also had a lot of people.but It was little bit dirty.But I played realy funny. I can't forget it forever.

-> Last island was the Real Beach and it  also had a lot of people there. Though it was little bit dirty, but I still  played there and it was really fun. I can't forget it forever.

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